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    First Chapter of a Story I'm writing...

    If anyone's interested.

    Comments and ratings welcome.

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    Certainly bizarrely amusing in places... haven't the faintest idea what the plot's leading to, mind!
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    That's great

    ...I couldn't make head nor tail of it, but I liked it.

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    How amusingly odd. I like it
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    Yeah good start IMO. Keep it up.

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    Awesome. Love the footnotes Good work
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    I wouldn't know the most about judging writing, but I like it, even if I couldn't really work out what it was about.

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    All those who are confused about the plot, have no fear. I am yet to develop a plot, and the point of this is to see how far I can write this before I run out of inspiration. Thanks for the comments anyway.

    I'm 14 years old if anyone's wondering.

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    Good start buddy. If you want honest feedback though, there a couple of things you can work on off the bat. You've obviously got a knack for words, so keep the storywriting going and you'll improve out of sight - but mark my words: stories that are random quickly get boring for the reader. I didn't even think Douglas Adams was worth much more than a kick in the pants.

    If you want feedback as a 14 year old though, it's a marvellous effort.
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